On Monday 27th of March 2k17 skateboard was canceled so room 8 asked us if they want play a game of line basket ball and we yelled yes.
And the 2 refs was Miss Ashley and Miss Morrison so everybody participate It was fun but some people pushed and shoved but at the end of the day every body shaked hands but lined up the best.
To leave the bottom court's it was really fun I was the first person to get the ball in the hoop.
I was really proud of room 7 because this the fourth time we have beaten room 8 four times in a row.At the end of the day everyone was shaking hands and showing manaakitanga.
Marking my story!
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R3
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What does this mean? "To leave the bottom court's it was really fun I was the first person to get the ball in the hoop."
ReplyDeleteYou need to reread your work to check that it makes sense. Your ideas are not in the right order so it can be confusing to read. Did you get the ball in the hoop after you left the court?